| Re: Dragons Legend
Well, you've got alot of run-ons, sentences that need to be revised to make more sense and the whole thing itself is completely out of format. Also, consider mastering you own language before creating an entirely new one.
I'm highly stressing the 'you've got alot of run-on sentences' part, by the way. Remember, only use 'and' once, never use too many commas to separate ideas (unless it's a list), and finally; it's always okay to use a dash or period. Well, not ALWAYS okay, of course.
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