Critique will be given.
Poems do not need to rhyme. With a little more editting this good be fairly good poem. Try to switch up the breaks in the poem. It seems everyone is using the same bloody format.
You also have two actions happening in one staza. Slightly anoying, in fact, really annoying. Instead of this:
Quote:
A crystal tear
A scream no one will hear
Watch her fall
This is the end
Possessed with hate
Help came just a little too late
She reached for love
Against her will
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You couldve done this:
Possessed with hate,
A simple tear falls.
She reached for love against her will,
But help came a little too late.
The other verses of your stanzas are extraneous.