Nympho

ZYTA!!!!! Zyta that is about me being pregnant and the unborn child living within me for nine months. You have no idea of the pain i have to go through when i wake!


Unsung Hero

A wounded warrior walks barefooted
In the path that seemed to be an endless maze
Holding unto his chest, his beloved mace
His face is marked by absolute grimace.

I liked this one. But i did not like the word grimace. It seemed thrown in.

Night Angel

Angel of the Night
The stary sky is so Bright
Take flight and soar
Bring Joy to the Living Night.

I dont like it at all. Sounds like all your other poems. They all say night in them and bright and flight.....I'm just not diggin the excessive words you use. I think that's something you need to work on. A poet is not just a four letter word.

Heaven

Behind the man i see
are two golden gates of light
as time immobilizes
they open and let me enter

This one is good. I can picture it well. Even though its description is short and less descriptive than others. I think you can add a little fat to this one and it will be awesome!

Work

Living in an endless hell,
He seeks to find what lies beyond.
Where he may find his own true path,
Regretfully, his journey is solitary.

This one is an A. No change needed.


Pending

Awaiting an awakening
In the dread of his life
Looking for more
And avoiding his strife

The beginning was good. But you went into a different direction than i thought you would. The last line should be thought through more thoroughly.

The moon has risen
clouds cover her one eye
my sin isn't forgiven
I knew everything was a lie

This one was pretty good. I like it. The second line needs more to it. Use at least one decriptive word.

Every day is a surp-rise
before the sun-rise
on the bus-ride
home.

This one was cute. Its fine to me.

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