Ju jitsu Dan

yo its my first poem on line i dont know how good it is but what do you guys think?

forever sorrow ,saga one.

i feel lost
i feel empity
my life is left without meaning
my heart is full of sorrow

i love you with all my heart and soul
only if you new how much
you were my light
my deliverance from it all
you made me hole

we become so close
now you decide things ant ment to be
i grow hollo
i become a shadow
my fury boils into streams of blood
my soul blackens
i become legion

my lost love fuels my rage
a rage unseen
unheard
until the day i wilt and break

i strike at those who oppose me
like a man possesed
my anger flows threw me
it makes me powerfull

i burn all
kill all
take all
i become war itsself

my hope
my light
is fadeing.......