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Old Sep 04, 2006, 06:57 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Childhood

Hmm. The short stanzas arent appealing ot the eye. In fact, the shor stanzas, no capitalization, no punctuation, and little to no description... Makes me not want to read the poem.

I think there should be more to a poem than words and and subject matter. There should be tricks of the trade, and some sort of imagery.
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