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Old Oct 10, 2006, 04:20 PM   #2 (permalink)
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^_^ That was a really good poem, Othello!

it was short, sweet and had a zing at the end!

^_^ i don't think much can be done to improve it cuz it's already so great! i would only suggest that you keep a similar amount of beats/syllables in your stanzas... but it's completely great otherwise!

keep up the good work!
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