Feb 18, 2007, 11:19 PM
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| Why so serious?
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| Re: fire in the heart
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Originally Posted by god of death 
im burning up with no true love, i fear im destined to be alone
i cry to try to put out the blaze, but im not strong enough to uphold my ways.
the fire in my heart is consumeing all the oxygen around me.
im now suffocating in my own dilema.
i gasp and grasp for anyone that would save me
| I love this stanza. It's a keeper!
This poem is so sad..I really like it. Quote:
im now suffocating in my own dilema.
i gasp and grasp for anyone that would save me
| I love those two sentences. It tells how they're vulnerable to anything, and are capable of getting their heart broken once more, starting the poem all over.
It's deep and has purpose.
Nice job! Keep it up!
Last edited by The White Wolf; Feb 19, 2007 at 01:03 AM.
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