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I dont think it seems stalkerish. I found there to be quite a statement in it.

I'm going to sudgest something, but I do so humbly. To me you are a superior writer.

The part where you wrote "I’ve been shielding you." stood out quite a bit to me... It was the first point in the poem where I felt like you were taking the responsibilty for easing this persons hardships.

It made me go back to the last lines of the first two stanzas.
"You’re just standing in the shade." "You’re asleep in class."... I thought about them being written as "You're just standing in my shade" and "You're asleep in my class"

See what I mean?...

Anyway, just a thought... the poem is outstanding either way.

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