Umbriel

Hey buddy why you teasin' us like this? Man this is worse than when I wiggle my cats favorite toy in front of her and then pull it away. That's the idea though is it not. Get our full attention and then leave us begging. You know it's funny when I do it to my cat, but she knows I'm gonna' dangle it again & then trow it for her to fetch, plus she'll get treats when were done paying.
I've done stories, I like "in the first person" myself. Gives it a more real feeling, makes it personal. The reader can more easily put themselves in the "part".
Alright.. alright I'm begging...... give us some more soon buddy. By the way, great opening.

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