Uuuuu... nice ^^ really good and realistic (appart from pink and green head
). And it's terribly interesting.. I really want to see the next chapter!!!!
I loved how you wrote that she goes and cries in the further corner... sounds damn much like me. And the way you've created the characters- the green haired guy. I really like it- sounds like what I did in my story "The Demon". But... it is quite obvious that the guy really likes the girl, though he tries to be evil, even in the first paragraph... so maybe you should work on that ^^ I know it is hard believe me, my "demon" is not a demon at all, but it's always worth to try. Creating him more evil will make the story more interesting ^^
Anyways- really nice work! I hope to see the next chapter!