Hmmm... describes the start of love very well, I remembered how that felt ^^ That was interesting..
Well I think I just need some coffe, I've read poems for far too long *giggles* but it seemed like it's a bit hard to read this because of the rythm... *reads again* No... I was wrong... the rythm is very nice, what makes it a bit odd is the way you write, here for example:
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Our song I can't help sing
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Well it's very interesting when you put the verb after the noun, but I think it made this poem harder to read, or is it just me?
Alltogether I really like it ^^ And I just love the edning (yes even though there's the odd placement of words in a sentence again)- nice way to end the poem and I've always liked it when the title appears apparently in the last lines only... ^^ well I hope to see more ^^