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Old Jan 16, 2008, 11:29 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Re: Mystery

well it was a good poem but a bit choppy at times.
uhm at some lines i really didnt get what you were trying to say..uhm
"the rose begin to show."

"As I watch the stars begin to glisten,
the roses hide from me."

I mean you have great images in your poem but i think next time mqake sure the whole poem flows smoothly

but good job tho
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