May 02, 2008, 02:05 AM
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| Re: Hatasune Miku Inspired
Wow!!! Master Dollmaker, this is such a wonderful poem. This poem made me feel the pain to say goodbye... ... ... and this poem for me feels some kind of longing to say hello... despite of saying goodbye.
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DON’T LET A MOLD CREATE YOUR WORLD,
FREE YOURSELF FROM THE SHACKLES OF SOCIETY.
GREET LIFE AS IT COMES AND DON’T LOOK BACK,
HOLD DEAR TO THOSE THAT CROSS THE CROSSROADS OF YOUR EXISTANCE.
| These lines struck me like lightning... it felt that these lines are for me (as a reader it felt that this poem talked to me and all). I really loved the imagery that you presented. By reading the said lines, I examine myself. Hmmm... I think you are very wise in making this kind of poem structure, very new to my senses. (Existance = Existence?)
The different fonts really help to convey the message of the poem accordingly. It's interesting that the last lines of your poem are closely together (is it on purpose?). I read it repeatedly.
Master Dollmaker this is a superb poem, I must say. I do hope that you would create more poems too (such wonderful arts).
I do wonder: inspired by "a few other things"
The color of the text hurts my eye... T_T
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