| Re: Broken
This is nicely performed and how everything got summed up with your feelings and emotions because not a lot of poems may do that at the same time. On how everything got affected by what the sky felt like and how the earth did for us but the emotions and feelings you had on you was more likely to control by itself, because everything in life does not achieve it by waiting for something to come up on your hand, you must do everything you can in order to get that right feeling and other personality you may wish for.
I must say, this poem has really strong will. Do please try to make it more of a stanze form, because it looks like it is in paragraph form rather then being plit up, also on how the words are being contradicted. But everything else you have done is really inspiring in what you have written so far and how you revised it into a more suitable position in the theme.
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