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PhoenixSara · May 05, 2008, 02:50 PM

i like this it shows a side of vulnerablility and sadness, but i suggest you put punctuations in between the phrases to make it look cleaner and will give the sentence the appearance that it is shorter.

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PhoenixSara Devoted Otaku Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am located in your imagination.....and dreams *** Posts: 630 Thanks: 29 Thanked 27 Times in 27 Posts Credits: 24,279	Re: with out you i like this it shows a side of vulnerablility and sadness, but i suggest you put punctuations in between the phrases to make it look cleaner and will give the sentence the appearance that it is shorter. __________________ Angels dare to go where devils don't dare to tread. Clan Rainstorm 2nd Company, Kunoichi Leader PhoenixSara Myspace / Click Me/Atlantis RPG/Rules and FAQ Last edited by gren; May 05, 2008 at 06:38 PM. Reason: removed quoted poem
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