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Originally Posted by PhoenixSara 
I never knew what love really is,
til you smiled and made me believe again.
I didn't know how love makes me fly
til you look me in the eye.
I didn't know my heart knew to sing
Til you told that love was a wonderful thing.
I didn't know that my heart could die
Til you told me you have to say good bye.
I never knew i can feel such pain
Til the hurt felt like it would make me insane.
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Your poem was really good but it lacked that certain natural flow that all good poems have, but i do have a suggestion for that, try writing like edgar alan poe which i dont mean become depressive and over dose on opium i mean write with longer stanzas so the flow forms better.