| Re: Wanderer
ok a few things you need to focus on. Stick ot one tense. YOu'll find that if you pick a tense so either he did this... or he does this it's going to be alot better to understand. If you do this I think that the ideas you have in your head will come to light for your audience too.
Until that happens I'm sorry but I have a hard time understanding the image that you're trying to create. It's still a good poem and the diction (words) are well picked. after you correct the minor tense problems then I can start trying to really help you because then I'll have an understanding of your ideas.
Oh and btw nice font color ^^ |