Soldat of life

Writer's Block

This was interesting, the rhymes didn't seem too forceful in the writing and they sometimes really well complimented the poem.

For example:

And its heights I cannot scale
For in comparison I do pale


Furthermore, the short lines seem to describe well enough the theme quite directly, which is good, yet I'm more of a long line lover. The word wall seems to appear quite often. I would have liked it even more if there could have been more variety to describe the word wall.


Crows - gren

This was just hilarious. At first I didn't see a pattern, but as the spaces put parts appart, I found something that slightly made sense. I do say slightly as it barely became clear to me only near the end. What hinted me was this:

eager maggots dancing on her stomach.


There was quite a bit of repetition in the words, but they were there to emphasis quite a bit on the moment. It sometimes felt like thrown out thoughts randomly spurred and at other moments, there was a hidden thread that brought everything together.

The darkness and a feeling of subtlety really got me going for this one.


Angel - Mechazawa

This one is the most complicated of the lot, yet there is quite a bit of images that I can portray if I concentrate hard enough on the lines. It is an evolving poem with a title that makes you better understand the poem once it has been fully read. A form of story with an attempt to show strong emotions is what I get out of this.

Escape

Recieve

Hope

Those are the words that strike mostly to me. I'd say this is overtly complicated and not everyone will read on till the end. But I like complicated things, so it's not so bad ^^




I pick........Gren in this case. It kept my attention the most, was easy to read and crept to me piece by piece in an unexpected way.

Congrats to all and hopefully I'll find inspiration in large quantities soon enough...I hope XD


EDIT: Yay for Gren so far, I seemed to have broken the 3 way tie ^^ I wonder if others will vote or this is the end.

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Thanks to Xelhes for this amazing work of art ^.^
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