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Japxican · Oct 10, 2009, 02:10 PM

Not bad. I liked some of you other ones better, but sometimes it's hard to describe love. Some things in the second stanza seem a little cliche (well, what isn't cliche?), but I like the first stanza; it's my favourite. I like that you used rhyme; it definitely gives this poem an edge. I don't think it would have the same effect if it wasn't.

Oct 10, 2009, 02:10 PM	#2 (permalink)
Japxican Newbie Join Date: May 2006 Location: Here, there, anywhere...kinda like eating green eggs and ham. Posts: 40 Thanks: 3 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Just Happy holding Hands Not bad. I liked some of you other ones better, but sometimes it's hard to describe love. Some things in the second stanza seem a little cliche (well, what isn't cliche?), but I like the first stanza; it's my favourite. I like that you used rhyme; it definitely gives this poem an edge. I don't think it would have the same effect if it wasn't.
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