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    Angel's Blooming

    The fire crackled, village people screamed, their children cried, blood stanned the walls, human bodies, brotheren and sisteren lay together in monds of dead bodies. Families parted, minds divided, and as all this happened. Maiyuki, the Fairy of Love, decided to seal herself in her most prized position a gold painted heart-shaped locket. After she had seen her friends and family killed in front of her she became deeply depressed. Maiyuki lost all concern for the world.

    Years have past it's now the night of October 20, 1992, the night my brother and I were born. I was three pounds five ounces and my brother weighted eight pounds ten ounces. With me being born so small I stayed in the hospital eight weeks after my brother and mom left, the doctors finally sent me home with only the expectation of dying within a weeks time. Thanks to my Aunt Audery's who feed and talked to me every second of the day,I lived. The one thing no one knew was that I would become the world's hope.

    Five years have past, it's Christmas and I have a baby sister named Asheley. We are all at Aunt Audrey's house, at the moment my aunt is passing out gifts, "Lorraine," her voice called out.

    "Coming," I replied.

    I excepted the gift and ran back to my spot on the floor. Moments later my Aunt Audrey called me into her living room, "Yes, Aunt Audrey."

    Did you like your gift," she tok my hands into her's?

    "Yeah."

    "Then why don't you have it on?"

    "Cause, I couldn't get it to stay on," I pretended to angry.

    My aunt laughed at my silliness then said, "Go get it and I'll put it on for you."

    I ran back to where I'd left my present and returned to my aunt. She wasted little time to link the chain, "Thank you," I said while I gently touched my necklace which glimmered slightly.





    (I hope you all liked it but if tell me what's wrong so that I can galdly fix it.)
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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    wonderful so beatiful and real good
    i would like 2 hear more of it plzz

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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    OH!
    I was totally amazed..^_^
    You based the story in your life or something else?
    But definitely great story^^..
    I want to read more of it^^
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    A really wonderful piece of writing! But, I would just be careful on your spelling

    Please do continue on this story it seems quite interesting.

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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    Yeah!Shizuka is right..
    it is good one and be more careful one your writing^^
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
    http://i52.tinypic.com/zxa8pj.jpg[/IMG

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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    Quote Originally Posted by receiverofhell View Post
    OH!
    I was totally amazed..^_^
    You based the story in your life or something else?
    But definitely great story^^..
    I want to read more of it^^
    It was just an idea that poped in my head so i decided to turn it into a story, but i've kinda given up on Angel's Blooming because its not going the way i wanted.
    Last edited by missbad818; Jun 09, 2009 at 09:45 AM.
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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    It was just an idea that poped in my head so i decided to turn it into a story, but i've kinda given up on Angel's Blooming because its not going the way i wanted.
    So do you mean that you gonna not continue this story?
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
    http://i52.tinypic.com/zxa8pj.jpg[/IMG

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    Re: Angel's Blooming

    It's a good idea, so why not try and re-write it. If it doesn't go the way you want it, re-write it so it goes the way you want. That's what I do when I run into a dead-end.

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