Excellent addition ta the story, I especially like the foreshadowin'. An indication that his death may b apart of a larger scheme? Hmm... Oh and 'bout my post earlier, I meant no offense wit the my referin' ta ur story in the past tense. I wasn' tryin' ta indicate that it would die. In fact, I'm lookin' forward ta u finishin' it.
P.S. Oh, and I know how ta spell ur name. What happened was that I had my hand positioned in the wrong place on the keyboard and I accidentally keystroked the i instead of the u when I typed ur name and didn' notice 'til jus' now. Sorry.