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    The Love Note 2

    Friday finally came and I was very excited. I had some thoughts though, if it was true or not. Either way I wasn't gonna let me. When the game ended he took me to his house.

    Me: What's wrong I thought I was going home
    Him: No, Lacy, I want you, I need you.
    Me: Well, No, You can't have me, I plan on staying clean until after marriage.
    Him: Let's get married then.
    Me: No! Take me home now Will!
    Him: Not until I get you...
    Me: NO!!!!
    Him: Fine. Here take this drink.

    I was having negative thoughts about his sudden offer of drink, but I guess it was ok

    Me: Ok. *drinks, then becomes unconscious*

    The next day, I had 2 messages on my phone. It was Selena. She said she told my parents she slept at my house to get me out of trouble. At this point, I could only see my phone, everything else around me was blurry. Suddenly, I felt a kick.

    Me: Huh? *moans, then yawns* Gosh, what time is it.
    To my surprise, I heard a voice say, "7:15." I jumped up at the shocking voice. As I looked at myself I felt a cold breeze. I was naked. I turned on the lights and to my shock, there, laying down, was Will.

    "AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!" I screamed.

    Will: Relax, your at my house.
    Me: YOU DIDN'T TAKE ME HOME! I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU DRUGGED ME!!
    Will: Fine I'll take you home, oh and I didn't rape you.

    The next few weeks, I felt sick. Will has mysteriously dropped out of school and could not be found. His parents said he went to live with his relatives in Russia, because he missed them. After a low pressure, followed by a faint, my parents took me to the hospital. As I got there the doctor asked what was wrong, and I told him my symptoms.

    Doctor: Well Lacy, Let's take a blood test.
    Me: Ok.

    The Doctor came 30 Minutes later.

    Doctor: Mr. and Mrs. Steve, I think I hear a heartbeat in her stomach.

    My parents looked shocked.

    Doctor: I don't know how to tell you this but, Lacy, your pregnant.

    I just stood there watching into thin air. He had used me. I smelled bad that day when I woke up at Will's house, and now I know why. I also had an unfamiliar taste in my mouth.

    The next few weeks were tough. My parents almost kicked me out. Then one day, I finally told them what happened.

    So now I, Lacy Steve, Am telling you this story of me and my "so-called-boyfriend" the one that got me pregnant. He called me to ask how I was and I told him. He was happy, but I just cursed him out. After this, that jerk was happy. Then he said he was dating a striper, and had a prostitution record. I never spoke to him again.

    So far he's out of my life. My friend Selena Beluni has been there for me in school. I am Due in 3 days. My future twins, Madalise Steve and George Steve.


    I am Lacy Steve, and this was my story...

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    I came up with this quickly The Sequal will come out soon.

    Thanks^^
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: The Love Note 2

    I liked it.....but some parts were kind of all of a sudden came out of nowhere...my opinion you could of builded the suppense.....(sorry for my spelling errors). but besides that it was good.

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    Re: The Love Note 2

    umm..hmm... to me there wasnt much suspense and it was pretty predictable. why would she drink something that he had just given her after hastily proposing to her to get into her pants? i thought that the main moral has to be dont go out w/ a person whose really screwed up. no matter how hot.

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    Re: The Love Note 2

    pretty awsome, keep up the good work when you can!
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