Lasura (Dec 19, 2007)
finally got the chance to read it. Damn studies, tests & other real life things. Always draining my time :P.
Nice work on it the both of you. Looks rather interesting. It's not often the author doesn't know what's gonna happen next.
I'm really gonna have to keep a better eye on this thing.
The Madman previously known as Daniel219
Wish I could get on here more often. *Sigh* The down side to night shift...
lol ^^ Thank you Daniel!!!!!!!!!! ^^ I'm glad you like it!!!!!!!!!
Where here is our next part, hope you enjoy ^^
After a five minute drive in the busy streets of London, the driver suddenly felt his passenger hit on his helmet.
“What is it?!” he shouted, moving his head closer.
“Take me to my flat!!!” Jane answered. The man shook his head: “No can do! It will be the first place they will search!”
“You obey me now!!! And I need to go and get something!!! Turn left!!!!!!” she shouted and the driver had no other choice but to obey this little lady. He stopped a block away from her flat.
“Get us a better ride and meet me in front of the house,” she said and walked towards her flat. The driver stared at her for a while, with anger in his eyes… How come this girl suddenly seemed to know what to do and how to do, from where did this power and strength she held suddenly appear? He spat on the ground drove off. He had to listen to what she says; one way or another- he would earn a lot from it later…
Jane slowly walked the street, carefully looking around, responding to any little sound and movement with only but a calm glance. She entered the house quietly and ran up the stares to her flat.
It didn’t take long for her to find what she needed. It stood on the table where she had always kept it.
It was a simple necklace, but it meant more than the world to her.
She could still remember when William gave it to her...
It was their first date, she had sneaked out of the house to be with him even just for an hour. They were about to part again when he took it out.
“This is a special piece,” he said, showing it to her, smiling. “Almost as special as you are. It might seem simple… But it is said that this little piece of gem could change the world…” he slowly put it around her neck. “Let it change your world.”
This piece of gem symbolized her breaking out of his father’s rule, her fight… her love...
Jane carefully put it in her pocket and ran out of the flat again, leaving the door wide open behind her. She ran down the stairs and smiled as she saw a grey car passing the street on the other side of the road- it was her ride.
But, just as she exited the door, the sound of a shotgun filled the air and a bulled hit the stone wall of the stairs. Jane automatically fell to the ground and shielded her head. It was right in time to avoid another bulled, which passed right above her now.
“What now!?” she shouted to herself.
Last edited by Lasura; Dec 19, 2007 at 03:06 PM.
yippee, the next piece...
you don't mind if I copy all of the ones you have posted so
far and keep them for myself. do you?
as for this piece, I can see the character, Jane is somewhat of a rebel...
and please post the next one soon. can't wait.
A rebel? Damn >.< I didn't want to show her like such a crazy gal.... Wanted to show that she's a bit spoliled after all and show what made her escape her father's rule...
Well I'm glad to see someone really likes our story this much. I'm extra happy because I really enjoy writing this ^^
Sure you can copy paste all the parts. But please don't post it anywhere else unless we allow you, k? ^^
And divine now has to write something ^^ But he's much faster than me so... ^^ should be soon ^^
"I'm sorry, I'm sorry!" Bryn cried, backing away from the elderly landlady with his hands raised.
"No trespassers!" the old woman screeched again, getting ready for another shot.
"I wasn't trespassing!" he retorted. "I only asked if there was a girl here! Er . . . long, dark hair . . . bright green eyes . . . sort of petite?"
"Up to no good, eh?" the old woman snarled. "I know your type! Vicious young hoodlums overrunning my city . . . Well, if the government won't do something about you, I will!"
"Damn it all! I just wanted to ask her if she's okay!"
tora_tora_yatta (Dec 19, 2007)
'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
'Cause someday I might call you from my heart
From what i read this story it is getting really good and is very intense can't for the next part...Great Job Lasura and Divine_Punishment keep up the good work
Made by mi amigo Mveli2
O.o oh no i missed a whole lot!!!! man i love the story so far very nice, and exciting!!!
I hope to see more!!! ^.^
'This world is trash. Cursed by the Fon Master...'