Thread: Star Wars: Tales of a Sith (CH 1)

The YV-330 light freighter landed on a platform in Nar Shadda. Two of the trackers, the chiss and Qhevn got out to head to the nearest pawnbroker. The other trackers were either counting the credits or they were guarding the ship. Qhevn dodged the crowd in Nar Shadda while the crowd dodged the chiss. They split off the main walkway into an alleyway. Qhevn looked around and said, “Hey Rudin, why do we always go to these back alley pawnbrokers instead of the nice ones on I don’t know say maybe Bespin?” Rudin, the chiss, replied, “These back alley guys don’t know too much about it when it comes to artifacts, so we get a better deal.” Qhevn nodded and the two entered the pawnbroker with their helmets still on. The pawnbroker himself, who must’ve been no older than 76 years old, greeted them with open arms, “Well if it isn’t the two trackers, my big customers, so what is it today boys?” Rudin chuckled and replied, “We got a statue aboard our ship, but with me I got a necklace.” Rudin pulled out the necklace. It glistened in the store’s light with all of its jewels and gold. The pawnbroker pulled out a magnifying glass and gazed at the necklace and then concluded, “Why that is a fine piece of jewelry you got here boys, looking really old too, older than me but it’s in great shape, I’d say… maybe five hundred fifty thousand credits.” Rudin and Qhevn looked at each other and said, “We’ll take it!” The shop owner pulled out a tablet and started filling out a transfer and said, “Now before I complete the transfer let’s head over to your ship and see that statue.”
The reached the ship and walked into it. They showed the pawnbroker the statue and he examined it very carefully, “I’ve never set eyes on such a fine piece of work in my life, but it seems to be slowly corroding so it’ll be less than its original value.” Rudin stopped him, “What would the original value have been?” The pawnbroker said, “About one million, but because of the corroding I’d say five hundred thousand.” Rudin nodded in acceptance. The pawnbroker added the five hundred thousand to the transfer and signed his name and then handed the tablet to Rudin, “Fill out your account number and sign your name.” Rudin turned his back so the pawnbroker couldn’t see his account number or name. He clicked the accept button with the stylus that was attached to the tablet. He handed the tablet over to the pawnbroker and had Pyro and another tracker take the statue over to the pawnbroker’s shop. Once they returned they all took off their helmets inside the ship and kept them there. The trackers headed over to a bar in Nar Shadda. The bar was dimly lit and small filled with so many different creatures you wouldn’t care to count. Rudin was sitting at the bar waiting for their drinks while the others were at a table. A dark cloaked figure sat next to Rudin and turned his head a little bit towards him, “I sense something in you.” Without even so much as a glance Rudin replied, “Well I don’t want to hear it if it’s about my work and what I do for a living.” The cloaked figure continued, “I sense… the force in you. I can take you to my master and he’ll teach you the ways of the dark side.” Rudin chuckled, “The last thing I need is to learn the ways of the force, I doubt it will come in handy unless some Imperial ship comes along and I need to give them the mind trick or something.” The bartender set down a tray of drinks in front of Rudin. Rudin picked up the tray and the figure said to him, “I sense a disturbance in your near future.” Rudin chuckled again and brought the tray over to his table. He sat down and handed out drinks, he moved in a little close to his table, “That cloaked guy said he was gonna teach me the ways of the force.” Everyone at the table made a deep laugh. The cloaked figure got up and walked over to Rudin, “When the time comes you can expect to find me in plain sight.” The figure walked out of the dim bar and the trackers laughed, “What a weirdo!”
After they had finished a couple rounds of drinks they headed back to the ship. They joked about the force all the way there; it got kind of old to Rudin considering what the cloaked man had said to Rudin about the danger in the near future. Once they got to the ship they heard a voice behind them and footsteps. It was a bunch of low class robbers of mixed races: Rodians, Trandoshans, and Grans. They all aimed there blasters at them, there must’ve been about ten of them. They were easily outnumbered. This was the first time Rudin had gotten truly nervous, this was the disturbance that cloaked guy was talking about, he thought. Qhevn drew his blaster and he was shot down by all ten thugs. A Rodian, who must’ve been the leader of the group, strutted up to them slowly with his E-11 blaster drawn he started speaking in the rodian language, from what Rudin could understand he was saying something like, “This is the end of the line for you thieves.” Rudin was holding back a slight chuckle he had. The Rodian leader nodded at one of the Trandoshans. The Trandoshan approached and pushed all of them away from the ship. One of the Grans places mines all over the ship. All of the trackers squirm while being held by the thugs, all except Rudin. He was expecting this. Once the Gran finished placing mines on the exterior of the ship he ran back pulled out a detonator and then the Rodian pushed down the button and the ship blew up. All of the trackers except Rudin yelled and screamed. Pyro activated a thermal detonator and lunged at the Rodian and blew himself and a couple thugs up. He missed the Rodian though. It was down to three trackers. The Rodian paced back and forth between the trackers, Ulri spit at the Rodian. The Rodian stopped and got as close to Ulri as he could without touching him. Ulri was squirming in the arms of his captor, bearing his teeth, and grunting. The Rodian calmly put his gun to Ulri’s head and shot him. Now there were two trackers left. Rudin realized how out of the way the platform was. The Rodian walked up to him and said, “You don’t squirm. Why is this?” Rudin just shrugged. The Rodian nodded and looked at the other one and asked the same question, “Why don’t you squirm?” The last tracker smirked and said, “I don’t squirm because I don’t have time for you worthless sacks of scum.” The Rodian walked up to the tracker and then stopped and noticed behind him at the entrance of the platform was a cloaked figure. He slowly began to walk towards the thugs. The Rodian freaked out, “Shoot him, shoot him!” The trackers were dropped and laser blasts flew towards the cloaked figure as he suddenly drew his lightsaber and began deflecting the laser blasts. Many thugs dropped and some ran for cover behind debris. Rudin simply lay on the ground watching the cloaked figure deflect the laser blast with his lightsaber. The other tracker lay on the ground beside Rudin and said to him, “Rudin, why the hell are you so damn calm?” Rudin replied, “That cloaked guy told me this was going to happen. Naturally I expected him to show up.”
Soon it was down to a Trandoshan and the lead Rodian. The Trandoshan did not last so long. The Rodian leapt over debris and grabbed the other tracker, leaving Rudin on the floor. The Rodian stood there with his gun to the tracker’s head cursing the cloaked man and saying he’ll kill the tracker. The cloaked man sent his saber spinning at the Rodian and ended up killing both the Rodian and the tracker. Once he obtained his lightsaber he walked over to Rudin and helped him up, “You’re a little late don’t you think?” Rudin asked the cloaked man. He removed his hood and replied, “Nope, perfect timing. I intend only to train you and not your friends.” Once the hood was removed the man appeared to be a human with red eyes, long grey hair, and pale wrinkly skin. Rudin was a little destroyed inside after witnessing the death of his teammates and the destruction of his ship. He had one question on his mind, “Who are you?” The man replied instantly, “Darth Night.” Rudin thought the name was odd, “Darth Night? Night? Don’t you normally have tough named after your position of Darth?” The Sith nodded and replied, “I’m usually an assassin for the Empire. I had lost the trail of a Kyle Katarn. It appears he had escaped from Nar Shadda and as I began to retreat to my shuttle I sensed your presence and stayed to seek you out.” Rudin found it strange, “So where are we headed?” The Sith replied, “My lair, Darkness’s Den.” Rudin found that strange as well, “So what exactly will happen there?” The Sith replied, “No more questions, you shall learn when you get there… my apprentice.” Rudin got a creepy feeling from Darth Night calling him his apprentice.

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IF YOU DON'T KNOW WHAT A YV-330, GRAN, RODIAN, TRANDOSHAN ETC. IS FIND OUT AT THE STAR WARS WIKI.

Hm... Interesting Beginning.. It's an amazing story but were they just looking for money or do the "riches" have some sort of hidden meaning behind them that won't be discovered until later? Which if it wouldn't be discovered until later, you wouldn't tell me because then that would ruin a surprise twist... Anywho, so far so good. I've seen you've posted the second Chapter so I'll go read that now. ^^

Seriously, your doing a wonderful Job, I like it. ^^

OMG! I could so finish the story right now because I think I have an idea about what's going to happen... But since I don't know and I want to see what happens as it's created... I'll wait and see if I'm right. Keep up the work! ^^x... I like this story...

You can make separate posts for separate chapters but please don't make multiple threads for the same story.

The shuttle came close to an Asteroid and Darth Night decreased the speed on the shuttle to make a perfect landing. The shuttle began to land in an area surrounded by cliffs. Once it landed Darth Night picked up his comlink, “Sergeant, close up the hatch and begin the flow of oxygen.” There was a pause, “Yes sir, wait a few seconds for the hatch to close and the flow of oxygen to be plentiful.” Darth Night nodded and Rudin asked, “Do you know my name by any chance?” The Sith looked at him and said, “You’re Rudin Karr; you got that scar on your face from a fierce fight on Nar Shadda two years ago.” Rudin was astonished, “How did you know all that?” The Sith chuckled at the question, “I sensed more than just your future in that bar.” Darth Night opened the Lamba Class Shuttle’s hatch and with Rudin he proceeded to his Lair. They walked across the barren asteroid and to Darkness’s Den. When Darth Night opened the door it was pitch black inside. Darth Night snapped his fingers and several torches lit up. Now Rudin could see a long hallway that ended in a massive room. The Interior was molded out of the asteroid. Darth Night and Rudin proceeded into the massive room that looked like an Imperial base. There were computers, controls, and radars galore. Darth Night walked over to a post. He pressed a button and a lightsaber appeared. He picked it up and walked over to Rudin. He activated the lightsaber to show off its yellow color. He deactivated it and handed it to Rudin to without question, immediately accepted it.
“It belonged to me before I created my new saber,” Darth Night began, “And in time I hope you will create your own saber.” Rudin held the saber hilt in his right hand, held it away from himself and activated it. After swinging and waving the saber around for awhile he deactivated it, “When do I start my training?” He anxiously asked Darth Night. Darth Night raised an eyebrow, “It has already begun my apprentice.” Once again Rudin got that creepy feeling. He didn’t know whether he was truly ready to begin, but he knew this was his destiny, “Rudin, do you know how the Jedi train?” Rudin shook his head, “Well normally it begins with you learning about your capabilities and how to use your force powers, and I believe that is non-sense. You will do my bidding and as you do so, you will learn about your abilities and capabilities.” Rudin nodded. Though he accepted his new master’s ways he was skeptical of this way of teaching, “But how will I know how to use my force powers?” Darth Night replied, “You think hard and attempt to do what it is that you want to be done.” Darth Night then gave Rudin a look, “You need an alias to cover up your real name.” There was a pause, Darth Night closed his eyes and inhaled deeply and said in a gravely evil voice, “Darth Lucidious!” His new name echoed throughout the massive room. The name Rudin now meant nothing to the now Darth Lucidious. Darth Lucidious was now overcome with a darkness so powerful it consumed his soul.

It's really starting to come along. ^^ I've never watch Star Wars but this is good. Keep writing. -waits for the next chapter to come out-

It has been a three years since Darth Lucidious began his training, he has done many missions for his master, Darth Night. He was sent on a new mission to crush a group of rebel spies that had taken over an Imperial cruiser. Darth Lucidious docked the Imperial shuttle inside the cruiser and got out. An “Imperial” officer came to greet him along with many “stormtroopers.” The “Imperial” officer began to speak, “Sir, this visit is quite unexpected-” and Darth Lucidious cut in, “Who is the leader of this ship?” The officer swallowed hard and replied, “Admiral Lash, why?” Darth Lucidious replied, “Take me to him.” The officer nodded and lead him through the ship and finally to Admiral Lash. Admiral Lash was in a secluded room. The officer left Admiral Lash and Darth Lucidious alone.
“Have fun taking over the ship Admiral Lash? Or should I call you… Kyp Lash?” Darth Lucidious spoke with a grin, seeking deep into Mr. Lash’s feelings. Kyp Lash turned around slowly and saw Darth Lucidious, “Rudin... is that you? I haven’t seen you since we took out that Imperial outpost.” Darth Lucidious nodded, “Kyp Lash, Corporal in the rebel army, why have you and all your rebel friends taken over this Imperial cruiser?” Kyp knew something was wrong, “Why do you want to know?” Darth Lucidious took a step closer and answered very sternly, “I work for the empire now, I am a Sith!” Kyp fell down backwards at the words he spoke. Darth Lucidious drew his lightsaber, activated it, and leapt on top of Kyp with the lightsaber’s blade to his neck, “All of you will abandon this ship or suffer the consequences of death!” Kyp turned as white as snow, “I can’t leave the ship it’s part of a rebel mission.” Darth Lucidious moved the blade closer, “Abandon it now!” Kyp’s natural skin color returned and he replied, “I cannot and I will not!” Darth Lucidious got off Kyp and backed away. His saber was still drawn, he then concentrated on Kyp and then it happened. He began to use the force power called Deadly Sight. Kyp began to smoke and burn. Kyp cried out in sheer pain. He burst into flames and then dropped to the floor dead, “I told you that you would suffer the consequences.” Darth Lucidious began to feel this new sense of power that began to consume his soul. He thought up a dastardly deed and felt he had to exercise his power. After slaughtering most of the rebel forces on the cruiser Darth Lucidious returned to the asteroid base. Once the door closed and the oxygen flow was adequate Darth Lucidious entered Darkness’s Den. Darth Night was sitting down and the time and turned around, “I sense much hate in you my apprentice.” Darth Lucidious activated his lightsaber.

I hate to be rude or anything but i feel like your rushing to create more chapters so that your readers won't be waiting for days at a time to read the next chapter.. You shouldn't do that...