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    Tales of Romance???

    okay well i've been working on this for a few days.and its has characters names from the Tales of the Abyss,Tales of Legendia,and Tales of Symphonia.
    hope you guys like...

    A pink-headed girl is wandering the empty hallway.

    "Oh no! My first day here and I'm already late for class."

    She keeps walking until she comes to her classroom.

    "Okay.Don't panic,don't worry.Everything will be alright."

    Just as she is about to open the door,the swings open,and she runs into
    someone.She falls down on her butt.

    "Ow."she looks up to see who she had ran into.It was a green-headed boy.
    She blushes lightly.

    "Who are you?"asks the boy harshly.

    She shrinks back."Arietta."

    "The new girl,eh?"says the boy."You're late.The teacher sent me
    to look for you."

    "I g-got lost."mumbles Arietta.

    "Well get up.We have class you know."the boy heads back in the classroom.

    Arietta gets up and follows the boy.

    "Ah,there you are."says the teacher "Did you get lost?"

    Arietta nods her head.

    "Well there is a free seat over there by the window."

    She turns around,happy that her new seat is by the window,until
    she saw that it was behind the boy she bump into.

    She walks to her seat.As she walks she feels everyone staring at her.
    She also feels herself blushing.

    She sits and the teacher starts to talk.

    "Just because its your first day back,doen't mean that you
    should relax.Get out some paper and write what i put on
    the board."

    Arietta sigh.So much for a normal day.

    Well its gets kinda interesting.if you have played any of the games you might like this....

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    I like how the beginning wasn't boring. It was fun to read to ^^. I liked it, good job and I hope you make more. ^^

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    oh thanks Angelflow seeing as how i couldn't put anything up since no respones came but i feel like no likes this story.....i mean i usally have more response by now....am i getting worse at writing????? well never the less heres some more story

    Lunchtime

    Arietta waits in line for lunch. She likes this school so far.Everything was okay,excluding her first class.

    Two boys are arguing in front of her. She pays no attention to them. She continues to think.

    Suddenly the two arguing boys bump ointo a man with a bucket of water.The bucket goes flying though the air. It splashes everyone behind the man.

    As everyone was complaining, Arietta hurries and gets her lunch. She goes to the farest table and starts to cry.Why couldn't this be a normal day?

    Then she felt something cover her head.

    "Hey!" she say ,taking it off. She sees the green-headed boy. She blushes.

    "Dry off. You don't want to get sick." he walks off.

    Arietta stares at him while he walks off.Then she drys off and begins to eat her lunch.

    Well i'll write more when i get response.......sorry if its kinda small i'll write more next time....

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    Uuuuu... nice ^^ really good and realistic (appart from pink and green head ). And it's terribly interesting.. I really want to see the next chapter!!!!

    I loved how you wrote that she goes and cries in the further corner... sounds damn much like me. And the way you've created the characters- the green haired guy. I really like it- sounds like what I did in my story "The Demon". But... it is quite obvious that the guy really likes the girl, though he tries to be evil, even in the first paragraph... so maybe you should work on that ^^ I know it is hard believe me, my "demon" is not a demon at all, but it's always worth to try. Creating him more evil will make the story more interesting ^^

    Anyways- really nice work! I hope to see the next chapter!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    oh thanks Lasura!!!^.^ well i like to think that he is evil well not so much its just his past that make...ummm.. not nice..... anyway heres some more story!!!!!


    A few minutes after that ,someone comes and sits down at her table.

    "You're the new girl,um, Arietta."She has black hair ,which are in pig tails.

    "Yes." says Arietta

    "So how do you know Sync?" asks the girl.

    "Who?"

    "That boy."she points toward the green-headed boy

    "Arietta shakes her head."I don't know him."

    "Really!"says the girl "I've never seen him talk to anyone let alone be nice to them."

    "Oh well we have first hour together and this morning......."Arietta explains what happen this morning.The girl giggles " Interesting. Oh by the way my name is Ansie."

    "Nice to meet you." says Arietta. Today may be a good day after all.....

    well i 'll leave it with this and when i get a comment i'll write more!!! ^.^

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    :P Haha! Now you must write more!!!!!!!! I posted a comment *leaves* ^^

    Jk ^^

    This chapter fixed the odd feeling that you gonna get them together- because here you really kinda said it with what Ansie said ^^

    It's nice... reminds me of my story "School Romance" I guess they all are alike. I have to fix "School Romance".

    Anime Online is like the place where to post your sketches, find out opinions to later be able to choose the best and fix them up At least to me it is so. ^^

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    lol thanks Lasura!!!! and anyway it is not..mine ids different ...somehow.....anyway heres more since u so kindly commented


    "So, have you joined any afterschool clubs?"asks Anise

    "No. Theres so much to choose from. What club are you in?"

    "I'm in cheer."says Anise proudly.

    "I wonder-" before Arietta can finish, another girl comes up to her table. Unlike Anise though,she looks like she does not want to sit here.

    "You're Arietta, right?"she asks

    "Yyes...."stutters Arietta

    "Well stay away from Sync!"and she stalks off.

    Arietta is shocked."Anise who was that?"

    "That...was Seles. She,like,in love with Sync or something."answers Anise"hey don't worry about it.What do you have next?"

    "ummm,Lit."answers Arietta

    "Me too. Come on lets go." They leave together.

    7th hr.
    Arietta is early to her last class of the day. She finds a seat and starts to think.

    "Hey."

    As soon as Arietta looks up she blushes. She had been thinking so hard that she hadn't notice that Sync was right in front of her.

    "Hello Sync."Arietta says shyly.

    Sync really didn't seem to care if she knew his name.

    "Meet me at the front hallway afterschool."

    "What?"

    Sync stares at her."I said meet me afterschool."

    "B-but i-"stutters Arietta

    The bell rings and a lot of people come in.

    "Just meet me okay?" Sync walks off to the other side of the room.

    "What could he possibly want?"Arietta mutters to herself.

    Well i wrote more so comment if you want more!!!!!^.^

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    Re: Tales of Romance???

    No offense or anything......but this sounds to girly for me.......like something out of a fantasy tale.........
    I mean the story itself is pretty good an all.............but it is not my style
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