I like the title - is very catchy
ack - kat fite! So full of drama and angst... I liked it. Only a few randomly misused words and a few confusing passages - but overall had a good flow to it.
Something you might want to consider for later - ALL CAPS - You should try to avoid and rely on punctuation, character description and dialog tags to get your meaning across. Gives your reader a broader picture of things.
good luck and best wishes -