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    Accidentally

    In the wind, The leaf falls......
    Under the Sun, i spot out.....
    I never knew, I gone there.
    Could said
    accidentally......

    We went there, accidentally
    We meet each other, accidentaly
    I love you , accidentally......

    Don't cry so hard.
    I won't harm.
    This is what you said that day,
    When we met each other.....

    I think you every day.......
    I want to see you every day.........
    just once! Is enough.
    Maybe would be accidentally...........

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    Re: Accidentally

    Quote Originally Posted by Katayame Ren View Post
    In the wind, The leaf falls......
    Under the Sun, i spot out.....
    I never knew, I gone there.
    Could said
    accidentally......

    We went there, accidentally
    We meet each other, accidentaly
    I love you , accidentally......

    Don't cry so hard.
    I won't harm.
    This is what you said that day,
    When we met each other.....

    I think you every day.......
    I want to see you every day.........
    just once! Is enough.
    Maybe would be accidentally...........
    Just as a reference point, is this an august entry? I need to know so i can judge it accordingly.
    Why hello there!

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    Re: Accidentally

    There is remembrance in this Neo ^^ it is like remembering the day they met. A sweet poem, but it' s very simple and still confusing at times. Also "could SAY", "i fell in love with u" and "I think OF u every day" would be much better ^^ Those are just suggestions to help you with your next poem ^^ Nice work alltogether.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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