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    Agony (POTM May Entry)

    A man severally injured may loose a limb.
    But the spirit endures, that will not stop him.
    If a leg gets shattered they will use a cane tomorrow.
    That will not cause a flow of tears that burn.
    Only one thing brings a mighty fathers heart to sorrow.
    One thing above all that makes blood run cold.
    The absent child they will not again hold.
    Longing for the ones who will not return.

    He sits mentally distressed in his small car,
    At night anxiously waiting outside a bar.
    With a gun whose caliber is forty-five.
    Ready to kill the next drunk who tries to drive.
    Things for him were not always so bleak this way.
    He was calm it seem just only yesterday.
    He takes a deep breath and tries not to cry.
    Recalling the light leave his daughter’s last eye.
    On her way home when hit by a drunk driver.
    Lasted an hour, but there would be no survivor.
    Still hears her respirator and EKG.
    Through the veil of time his mind could quickly see.
    He saw all way from the Delivery Room,
    Up until he gave her away to her groom.
    A drunk stumbles out, reaching for car handle.
    The man explodes into a Roman Candle.
    Blackening his eyes, and breaking hard his nose.
    Face bloodied bad, lips split apart, down he goes.
    The gun is ready; pointed at his beat face.
    He realizes his pain this will not erase.
    Giving him a hard butt stroke, his jaw does break.
    At least tonight no one’s life will that drunk take.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    Wow... this struck a real personal chord with me. I nearly killed myself and child while driving under the influence of alcohol.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    Crap that hits close to home for me.
    I have to say I drink but i don't drive because i have a friend who die like that and just like that father in the poem you find out that taking revange is pointless in the end nothing can take the pain away.
    Really good poem beast.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    I likey. Its written great, its like you can really feel the pain and sadness. I was kinda sad after reading it, I was like awww. Plus I think it sends a great message not to drink and drive.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    that was amaising that was just amaising. that made me tear up for i lost one dear to me from a casualty to alchall that was full of pain just like i felt.

    within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    What I want to know is where did it say that agony was even the theme because i cant find the post and we still haven't found out t the winner to January's contest AND there was no February march or April contest. why isn't there an April contest i mean its April 2nd. jeez this section on the forums seems to have lost its mojo.



    Beast the poem was absolutely wonderful and sorry to rant about that posted above but it really aggravates me on how down hill this section has gone.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    Quote Originally Posted by starfire1036 View Post
    What I want to know is where did it say that agony was even the theme because i cant find the post and we still haven't found out t the winner to January's contest AND there was no February march or April contest. why isn't there an April contest i mean its April 2nd. jeez this section on the forums seems to have lost its mojo.
    I think the Chief has been preoccupied with other things, if it means that much to you guys to have a competition each month, pick out what you want to write about and then pm me or something, and we will set it up. I'm not too inspired by poetry but I can always help you set up a contest, if you would like.

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    Re: Agony (POTM May Entry)

    I've tried that before. me and beast had inquired about setting up our own contests and then chief took over. Ill think of something.

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