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    Awaiting October entree

    Awaiting true love is hard and tough
    being alone is proof enough
    on a long road Awaiting her man
    she diligently poses like no man can
    after she waited years for him
    she awaited for him again
    knowing true love would pass her by
    her man came to late for she had withered and died
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Re: Awaiting October entree

    wow baby, that's really deep, when did you think of this?

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    Re: Awaiting October entree

    This is certainly posted in November and for the November entry you had to reference the given song in your poem, get inspiration from the given song. Therefore this poem can not be accepted this time. Do be careful when entring the POTM- the poem must follow the theme!

    The poem itself is rather nice though, romantic, but it seemed very depressive to me I hope i dont wither and die waiting for my man XD

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    Re: Awaiting October entree

    Wow baby... did i just saw the other side of you Lasura?

    I certainly agree, it's short and the rhyme is nice.. but to me... the rhythm is not quite that good... i don't really know how to read it... >.<

    This is the line which i have trouble with :

    she diligently poses like no man can
    after she waited years for him
    I just got stuck after "no man can" >.<

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