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    Blood Thirst




    Blood Thirst


    Dark clouds conceal the moonlight,
    A walking skinny black cat is at sight;
    Legs constantly trembling with fright
    Brown eyes kept on searching for light.

    The rain pours violently,
    Thunder bangs the sky harshly,
    The chilly wind blows slowly,
    Seconds seemed to be hourly…

    Little by little moving forward,
    Hands are kept straight sideward;
    Step…step…step…step…
    It’s a danger signal: stay on guard!

    Fragile body starts to petrify;
    As the unknown steps intensify,
    Lips began to shake unceasingly.
    A dark hooded figure approaches surely.

    The dark hooded figure shows his thin hand,
    Caressing his innocent victim’s hair strand.
    His wool- knitted hood was removed
    White and sharp fangs appeared.

    Sharp fangs penetrated into the neckline,
    Dark red fluid oozing fine
    The Big Ben strikes nine,
    The vampire said “you are mine”.

    Helpless, the victim surrendered
    Giving-in to what the vampire desired.
    Open-eyed, she wandered
    “How long shall I suffer?”

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    my my... very discriptive... love it~! ^^ and the rhymes are good really nice.. the flow too ^^

    Looks like a winner's poem.. good luck to ya...

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    Vamps, well I never thought a comp would be about vamps.
    so let's see I like the fact that it runs well, and it is not longwinded.
    I like it and I think you have a great shot for POTM.good luck.

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    @RAyme: Thanks very much for your comment on this poem. It's time for me to exercise my rhyme scheme again. =^^= I wish you luck too for POTM. ^^

    @overload: Thanks for your comment on this poem. I chose vampire because I remembered watching "An Interview with a Vampire" during my teen years. ^^ Thanks for saying good luck ^^

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    A+ ! What an impressive presentation! The picture is a cute touch. And the poem flows very well.
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    Thanks for your comment Peach-follows =^_^=. I put a picture to suit the poem (ehem I guess the victim is enjoying the vampire's company)

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    neat... looks like it was really sharpened fully... i like it... you do well with rhymes you know that... oh yeah... and the pic is froum ouran highschool... haha...
    i'll choose to love whoever i wish to love and nobody can stop me from doing so ----

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    Re: Blood Thirst

    @crimson: hihihi! I just love the rhyme scheme and all. I am very pleased that you liked my poem. =^_^= Yeah the pic is froum Ouran (Tamaki-senpai).

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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