Closed Thread
Results 1 to 3 of 3

Thread: Change

  1. #1
    Otaku Stickicide 2 Champion starfire1036 is making a name for themselves starfire1036 is making a name for themselves starfire1036's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2005
    Posts
    375
    Thanks
    59
    Thanked 47 Times in 45 Posts

    Change

    There is a mustyness in the air
    a feeling of cold.
    Can it come true,
    what the oracal foretold?

    The sky seems to darken
    and the clouds grow.
    The sun disappears
    the wind begins to blow.

    Them moon seases to rise
    yet the ground seems to still glow.
    The darkness arises as the sun never does.
    Hell rises from the gates below.

    The plants die
    and the land becomes dirt.
    The oceans dry and
    so does the earth.

    The time has come
    and the planet has changed.
    Take heaven from above
    and put hell in its place...

    What she saw
    was death like no other
    Bodies lying cold and raw,
    and left all but covered.
    Last edited by starfire1036; Sep 13, 2008 at 02:57 PM.

  2. #2
    Fallen Angel PhoenixSara may be famous one day PhoenixSara's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2008
    Location
    I am in between Heaven's Gate and Hell.Angels are not supposed to fall but i did.
    Posts
    1,041
    Thanks
    42
    Thanked 59 Times in 55 Posts

    Re: Change

    nicely done but i would be more careful about typos' on a poem as it puts a different meaning on it;

    The time has come
    and the plante has changed.
    Take heaven from above
    and put hell in its place...
    plant or plants is what i want to ask as plans do change but meraphorically speaking plants are plants in a writing context plants can refer to one's growth.
    Last edited by PhoenixSara; Sep 12, 2008 at 12:54 PM. Reason: edit
    "In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends."
    Clan Rainstorm 2nd Company, Kunoichi Leader
    PhoenixSara FB / Click Me IMVU/Atlantis RPG/Rules and FAQ/MY BLOG /

  3. #3
    Otaku Stickicide 2 Champion starfire1036 is making a name for themselves starfire1036 is making a name for themselves starfire1036's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2005
    Posts
    375
    Thanks
    59
    Thanked 47 Times in 45 Posts

    Re: Change

    Quote Originally Posted by PhoenixSara View Post
    nicely done but i would be more careful about typos' on a poem as it puts a different meaning on it;



    plant or plants is what i want to ask as plans do change but meraphorically speaking plants are plants in a writing context plants can refer to one's growth.
    It is planet and im dorry about spelling it wrong... xD

Closed Thread

Similar Threads

  1. Change!
    By HolderOfTheDarkChalice in forum Poems
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: Aug 31, 2008, 01:22 AM
  2. IP Change on AO
    By Sinistra in forum Announcements
    Replies: 14
    Last Post: Sep 29, 2006, 03:51 PM
  3. what would you change...?
    By bloodymoonreaper in forum The Chat Forum
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: May 22, 2006, 08:07 AM
  4. Name change
    By Twitchy in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: Dec 15, 2005, 01:14 PM
  5. Can I ask for a name change?
    By *OMNI THWACK* in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 8
    Last Post: Dec 09, 2004, 07:05 PM

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts