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    Choice

    Falling into Darkness
    Rising into light
    I'll never leave
    This endless plight

    To help my neighbor
    To strike him down
    In the middle
    I just might drown

    Looking up at Heaven
    Glaring down at Hell
    Both of them enchant me.
    Their everlasting spell

    To foster peace
    To go to war
    Both of them seem
    So tempting to implore

    Praising generosity
    Spreading dreadful hate
    Will I be a godly man
    Or Evil Incarnate?

    Good chi and bad
    Yang and Yin
    No matter the choices
    I'll never win


    This is my POTM submission.

    Please tell me what you thought of it.
    Last edited by ILikeApples5520; Aug 27, 2007 at 11:11 PM.


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Choice

    Wow... this is great!. No one has ever made the choice between good and evil seem so thoughtful and complex to me before... I usually never sway. Im usually good or bad. But When I read this, I felt torn with you.

    Then end enhanced it in my opinion. Like to say "damned if you do, damned if you don't". Almost as if you wanted to walk away from the decision all together.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Choice

    Thanks for your comment, Peach.

    Yeah, I think i will keep the last stanza. It does give the poem some finality.


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Choice

    wow good poem very good description of words it really shows ur emotions good work keep it up ♥~*The Princess*~♥
    Yeah, Bye.

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