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    Collaboration w/ Beast. :D

    SEVERITY

    In the wake of new thunder
    a heart's left a blaze.
    Her mind he has gone to plunder
    and her body he has put in its grave.

    A head on a table
    cut open and raw.
    His hand set sturdy and stable
    and a blade he will draw.

    Refusing to see what he's done
    Tears flow from each eye
    Arms open, she starts to run.
    For she must still love this guy.

    For illusions she loved
    Denial blinds; she goes forward.
    into chaos she was shoved
    Stabbing herself on his stealth sword.

    A killing spree has been started
    and the bodies are piling up.
    He cuts her open
    and her blood drips into his coffee cup.

    She is bound to the table,
    her fingers and toes still flailing.
    He is dissecting her
    as she is still wailing.

    Great work BEAST lol out masterpiece is a success
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    Re: Collaboration w/ Beast. :D

    I suggest using spell check, you have 2 misspelled words.

    SEVARITY should be Severity

    disecting should be dissecting

    Also:
    and her body he has put in it's grave.

    the it's should be "its"



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    Re: Collaboration w/ Beast. :D

    Quote Originally Posted by Chiefblackhammer View Post
    I suggest using spell check, you have 2 misspelled words.

    SEVARITY should be Severity

    disecting should be dissecting

    Also:
    and her body he has put in it's grave.

    the it's should be "its"

    so harsh... haha changes made... you could have said if you liked it or not.

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