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    The Days That Passed!

    A windy day brings to mind of a time
    when people smiled and children flew kites,
    dogs ran across a flower filled meadow and
    life was so much simpler.

    Times have been so sad and indifferent
    people cry buildings crashing , terror everywhere
    no safety for anyone , people mistrust and neglect
    its all part of life's grand design nothing is perfect
    forever.

    People struggle as lives slip away into nothingness
    and skies turn dark the smile wiped away by a sadness
    no love anymore is there to be had only frustration and
    aggravation no one really cares.

    People laugh at tragedy and death make jokes of how
    things are never realizing that it could be them , and if they do
    think about it its only for a moment because there souls are numbed.

    What ever happened to holding hands in friendship , is there
    anything left in this world to smile about , or is it all just a fading dream
    that came crumbling down when trust and love became a game , if only time would turn back to a simpler time.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The Days That Passed!

    This is a very nostalgic poem and I like how it analyzes life how it is, was, and could be.

    But I couldn't feel any rhythm to it.

    Even if a poem's not supposed to rhyme, it still has to have rhythm.

    Oh yeah, I think they're using to day for judging and that any entries that come in today will be discounted.

    To make things fair, I hope they do count it.


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    Re: The Days That Passed!

    holder u started writting poems.............awesome........i really lyked it........

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    Re: The Days That Passed!

    maybe u should too mage ^^

    that is a nice poem Holder.. nostalgic... yup...agree with that... i like with what u try to present here...it's simple and easy to understand.. good job

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    Re: The Days That Passed!

    Very dark poem that makes sense cause with so much cruelty and violence going on now it's hard to find anything to smile about,but thank goodness there are still a few things left to be happy for. Great job.
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    Re: The Days That Passed!

    i love the poem good work alot of emotions shown through out the poem
    very good ^^ keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥
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