The Days That Passed!

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Aug 30, 2007, 02:22 PM

A windy day brings to mind of a time
when people smiled and children flew kites,
dogs ran across a flower filled meadow and
life was so much simpler.

Times have been so sad and indifferent
people cry buildings crashing , terror everywhere
no safety for anyone , people mistrust and neglect
its all part of life's grand design nothing is perfect
forever.

People struggle as lives slip away into nothingness
and skies turn dark the smile wiped away by a sadness
no love anymore is there to be had only frustration and
aggravation no one really cares.

People laugh at tragedy and death make jokes of how
things are never realizing that it could be them , and if they do
think about it its only for a moment because there souls are numbed.

What ever happened to holding hands in friendship , is there
anything left in this world to smile about , or is it all just a fading dream
that came crumbling down when trust and love became a game , if only time would turn back to a simpler time.

ILikeApples5520 · Aug 30, 2007, 05:52 PM

This is a very nostalgic poem and I like how it analyzes life how it is, was, and could be.

But I couldn't feel any rhythm to it.

Even if a poem's not supposed to rhyme, it still has to have rhythm.

Oh yeah, I think they're using to day for judging and that any entries that come in today will be discounted.

To make things fair, I hope they do count it.

Heartless_mage · Aug 30, 2007, 07:10 PM

holder u started writting poems.............awesome........i really lyked it........

*RayMe* · Aug 31, 2007, 05:29 AM

maybe u should too mage ^^

that is a nice poem Holder.. nostalgic... yup...agree with that... i like with what u try to present here...it's simple and easy to understand.. good job

CherryBlossom18 · Sep 02, 2007, 12:41 AM

Very dark poem that makes sense cause with so much cruelty and violence going on now it's hard to find anything to smile about,but thank goodness there are still a few things left to be happy for. Great job.

iluvmyloser · Sep 08, 2007, 08:35 PM

i love the poem good work alot of emotions shown through out the poem
very good ^^ keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥

Aug 30, 2007, 02:22 PM	#1 (permalink)
HolderOfTheDarkChalice King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,783 Thanks: 20 Thanked 19 Times in 18 Posts Credits: 2,476	The Days That Passed! A windy day brings to mind of a time when people smiled and children flew kites, dogs ran across a flower filled meadow and life was so much simpler. Times have been so sad and indifferent people cry buildings crashing , terror everywhere no safety for anyone , people mistrust and neglect its all part of life's grand design nothing is perfect forever. People struggle as lives slip away into nothingness and skies turn dark the smile wiped away by a sadness no love anymore is there to be had only frustration and aggravation no one really cares. People laugh at tragedy and death make jokes of how things are never realizing that it could be them , and if they do think about it its only for a moment because there souls are numbed. What ever happened to holding hands in friendship , is there anything left in this world to smile about , or is it all just a fading dream that came crumbling down when trust and love became a game , if only time would turn back to a simpler time. __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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ILikeApples5520 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Bergen County, NJ Posts: 297 Thanks: 8 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 6,148	Re: The Days That Passed! This is a very nostalgic poem and I like how it analyzes life how it is, was, and could be. But I couldn't feel any rhythm to it. Even if a poem's not supposed to rhyme, it still has to have rhythm. Oh yeah, I think they're using to day for judging and that any entries that come in today will be discounted. To make things fair, I hope they do count it. __________________ Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!
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Sep 08, 2007, 08:35 PM	#6 (permalink)
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