Here is a poem i wrote. I also made it into a song.
They say that its pre-determined,that little word called Fate. But that isnt
true. For the worlds fate remains undetermined.
The worlds state confuses me. Even if we make it, the worlds losses would
be terrible. The people would dispair. They'd have no hope.
Dont be afraid. I'm right here by you. Please dear,please dont cry. Its not
good for the both of us. You and I both know that, my dear.
The droplets of fate have yet to reign down on the world. Courage and love
are the most powerful weapons we have.
The tears in your eyes, the ache in your heart.I understand, but it doesnt
matter. I must leave you now. I wish I could stay and kiss you one last time,
but I must leave you now.
I know you want to come with me, but its too dangerous for you.
I know your strong, but if anything happened to you I would never forgive
Farewell, my dear.
my man thats the best poem i have ever read i hope to
read and see more like that its sad as well man keep
up the great work man
katsoyori33 (Jan 13, 2008)
thanx jveli3. so what does everybody think? please tell me. its a song i wrote and i need to know whether its good or not.
This poem is excellent, it has a very powerful statement behind it. very well written. keep up the good work, bro!
katsoyori33 (Jan 14, 2008)
Good job ^^ I enjoyed the poem alot. It has alot of strong words to back up a strong message. wonderfully done but i wish you had gotten into it more like make it a bit longer but still very well done ^^
Good flow and good work^^ I love it !!!!!!!
IT so sad but its gots strong emotions^^
keep it up^^
wow this poem is so awesome i love it its good with its rhyming and the words are cool keep up the great work
!mveli2 (Jan 15, 2008)