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Old Aug 12, 2007, 05:38 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Froze

Frozen

Solid.
Hard like a rock.
The sea is frozen still.
Mists of vapour fill the air.

In the middle,
my heart beats slowly.
Under the frozen thick layer of ice.
Almost completely froze.

Cold.
The times of being alone.
I can only sigh about it,
while it slowly gets wintery in there.

Tormenting the warm soul.
I can not hold much longer.
My source of light is gone.
I need to melt down this hell.

Dark.
Like a room with no opening.
Trapped in a cube.
No where to go and no escape.

Putting a smiling mask.
Conceal the tears and red eyes.
I want to show my true face,
yet i don't want to gloom others.

Waits.
Theres nothing else i can do.
How long can i keep this up.
It is challenging my wits and endurance.

I won't hold for long.
Icy walls are falling and opening new wounds.
I am trying my best.
I hope you can be here sooner.

The faster the better,
before another light wash away the winter.
Before it melts all the ice away.
Before it is too late.
Before i am gone.
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Old Aug 12, 2007, 06:26 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Rayme!!!! A good poem, sounds like someone who hides thier heart. Not letting anyone see the wounds from past relationships.
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Old Aug 12, 2007, 06:28 AM   #3 (permalink)
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It's cold @.@ *shivers on the ground* oh hey ice ^^ thx for the comment.. im glad u like my humble poem...
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Old Aug 12, 2007, 09:00 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Chilling.. literally. You captured some really raw emotions in this. depression, and the need to supress it for the sake of others. You put the ice in isolation. (yeah... that was a lame joke).
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Old Aug 13, 2007, 12:37 AM   #5 (permalink)
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*laughs* im lamer then for laughing at the joke? ^^ ty for the comment again! ^^
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Old Aug 16, 2007, 05:24 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Re: Froze

your poem isn't bad, but then it's not what i am used to reading or writing for that matter, practice makes perfect and you're close...
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Old Aug 16, 2007, 06:00 AM   #7 (permalink)
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your poem isn't bad, but then it's not what i am used to reading or writing for that matter, practice makes perfect and you're close...
Thx for being honest ^^ *bows* i'll do better next time...
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*reaches out and touches you from behind* ray... it's a good poem and i like it.
It speaks to the heart and shows emotion that i used to feel was all i had. *holds out my hand*
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Old Aug 20, 2007, 12:11 AM   #9 (permalink)
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*screams like a girl* oh god jamie... @.@ u scared me...

thx i did my best
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