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You are late No Still ..we have Time..
Let me start and say ..this poem awesome and really Nice flow there ..
Is that a bout Halloween ..Yeah ..*Happy Halloween*...^^
Hmm... I hope I'm not too late... It's not in my clock... still half an hour 'till NovemberIf I am too late just move this to simple poem forum please? ^^
i hope I'm not too late to enter... I'm not by my time it's still half an hour 'till
I look up to where we stood before
I look up to from where we fell
I see nothing but pitch black dark
I feel only the pulse in my head…
Throbbing… Repeating… Hurting…
I call out your name
I hear no answer
I hear only the wind outside shouting
And something like sound breathing…
Quiet… Shallow… Pain…
I stand up and try to walk
A few steps and I fall again
I call your name again
I feel flesh, I feel something moving…
Crawling… Creeping… Biting…
Just as for a curse, some light shines again
A shout breaks out of my mouth
A view of the highest horror-
The body of a man dead long ago…
Rotting… Resolving… Alone…
The door… my only escape
Don’t look back, go on, go on
Open the door! Don’t look back
I feel the man behind me…
Breathing… Steps… Touch!
The doors break open
I fall, I look back-
There’s nothing…
Steps. Where are they coming from?
Closer… Louder… Colder…
I run towards the closest door
I still must find him...
I can see a shadow coming closer
I shout and smash at the door…
Pain… Pulse… Shadow…
It touches my shoulder…
I turn around and kick and scream...
It grabs me, it pulls me close
It’s cold touch taking me over,
The shallow, slow breathing hitting my neck
“Shh… it’s me…”
I cry… What a feeling it is…
My horror is gone,
Let the hot tears flow, take away the pain
Let me hold him tight and forget of the horror of this night…
A Halloween turned bad because of a crack in the floor
Last edited by Lasura; Nov 01, 2007 at 01:47 AM.
You are late No Still ..we have Time..
Let me start and say ..this poem awesome and really Nice flow there ..
Is that a bout Halloween ..Yeah ..*Happy Halloween*...^^
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wow that poem was great lasura your so good hope to see more from you and i cant wait to see more
Thank you xxoxx and mveli!!!!!! ^^ I'm glad you liked it, I tried my best.. the best I can do without real inspiration.... ^^
Yes it is about Halloween... kinda two people go into an emty house and smash through the floor suddenly... and you see what happens with the girl. Yes, she finds a dead body there... Probably some beggar, they'll have to call police now and do stuff I bet...
Thank you both again!!!! ^^ Hugs!
Ooh.. very interesting..love the flow and the suspence to it... gah very nice indeed
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Good luck to ya ^^
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Yay!!!! ^^ It has suspence? That's great to hear (it was the only thing I thought could pull this poem through
Thank You Ray ^^ I'm glad you find it good... And good luck to you too :P (I don't need luck, because I'm not aiming to win :P, I'm just having fun and some training with writing about a given theme)
I love it! You should write scary stuff more often!
You said you missed seeing my work. I haven't dissapeared... only faded a little.
But what about you........ where have you been?
... Not Ever Again...
I'm trying, I'm trying- my imagination works quite good actually, but I just can't seem to put it in words. I don't think I managed to do it here too... But I'm trying and maybe with time
I didn't have net and I only just now came back from South Africa
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