July POTM - Freedom [Winner = beast]

Chiefblackhammer · Aug 05, 2009, 08:57 PM

Peach_follows

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Originally Posted by Peach_follows

Was he free to mess with her mind? Disregard her heart?
Was she free to revel in the pity of a victim?
Am I free to throw away the food that's on my plate?
...When they say I take advantage of the system?

Or can we eat and eat.. And, take and take.
When someone else, they starve across the sea?
We go to warm climates on our Christmas breaks.
...Must be nice for us to feel so free.

You are free to love your fellow man,
Embrace them as a sister or a brother...
You're also free to hate and reprimand,
And, take away the freedom of another.

Freedom of fabrications, lies and fake smiles.
And, the freedom to turn the tables all around.
We could go as far as our minds could expand.
...After all, it's only us that keeps us bound.

We're free to hesitate, before we make new starts.
We're free to not do anything at all..............
If she makes herself a target, he should break her heart.
So she's free to seek a savior from her fall.

IS freedom an absence of constraint?
Or does it more so help define our limitations?
Real freedom is outside the box.
When you exceed your own expectations.

Sazzy

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sazzy

Forbidden Freedom

Caught in this cage,
Am I here till my dying age?
While all my pain swells,
On my memories I dwell.

Waiting for the moment to be released,
Rather than be held on the leash.
Away from all the world to see,
Unable to roam wild and free.

I don't want this life of misery,
I want to explore the mystery.
Of the outside, open world,
To see the glorious sight to behold.

I'm fed up with all this dreaming,
Can't you even hear me screaming?
With all this pain you've caused me,
Your not the person I thought you'd be.

So please not let me go,
To spread my wings and start to grow.
Experiences things other than boredom,
Instead give me whats mine, my freedom.

starfire1036

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Originally Posted by starfire1036

Ah, Just couldn't stay away.

As I hold you here,
you kicking and screaming,
my intentions become clear.
You, my dear, are never leaving.

You are bound to me
with an unbreakable chain.
Your heart I shall keep
and your energy I shall drain.

Little by little
your breath begins to weaken.
Colder and colder,
your hands, my dear, are freezing.

I press you up tight
against that cold damp brick wall
binding your hands.
You shall dangle and not fall.

Light on your feet
your knees at an angled bend.
Your soul is mine
for, you aren't my friend.

I have taken your freedom
and your life soon to follow.
Your body shall hang and rot
while your soul is mine to swallow.

beast

Quote:

Originally Posted by beast

A soldier ripped up still lives as his blood keeps flowing out.
Nothing but gasps are made as for help he tries to shout.
Reaching for his pocket this grunt knows it is time to go.
What comes out of the cargo pocket is a burnt photo.
The sister and mother living in their native country.
This is what the fighter wants in final seconds to see.
First the brave man did it just to send cash to his mother,
Then wanted to avenge loss of one close as a brother.

The smoke is thick, a freedom fighter is choked by the smell.
At no one perticular with burnt lungs he tries to yell.
Near this one's heart the man keeps a piece of a tattered sleeve.
From the younger sister whose death he continues to grieve.
Playing in the park, a missle flew in, they heard no alarm.
A bright flash and shaking, then all that was left was her arm.
Joined a rebel band to kill those they were told are to blame.
To the parents back home the fate of their kids is the same.

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Even as I am writing this brave Iranians are demonstrating and being run down by armed men. They are doing this because they understand that freedom is not free. Likewise people on both sides of a conflict fight for freedom.

FLawEdmiNd

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Originally Posted by FLawEdmiNd

Lines close the borders of sight,
turning everything to iron.
Silhouettes and pyramids, stacked in a line.
Anubis frowns upon my fortune.

Treacherous as the act may be,
Caesar stole my heart in his ivory skin.
The lines become thicker
looping around my neck, wrists, soul

Men once loyal to my name are enemies
loyal only to the new ruler.
Wind howls at my cage blowing in the sand,
my only friend the sand.

All my tears are dried up in it
seeking understanding in any one grain,
I was empress and how dare they;
no one dare impede my dominance.

Cleopatra of the world
and lover to the Sphinx.
My eyesight becomes lesser,
smaller as my freedom is sacrificed.

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Apparently Caesar and Cleopatra were intimate. Perhaps that was forbidden by Egyptian law? Who's to say when freedom is such a precarious thing..

LadyJuliaHale

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Originally Posted by LadyJuliaHale

Broken Body

Freedom is something I surely lack,
How can you learn how to hack
At the chains that bind me here,
Nothing passes but a single tear.

Who knows how to break free?
Who can figure out that this heart hurts me?
No one understands,
For the wind blows freely through my hands.

Enough is enough,
How can I begin to feel tough?
How can I escape this broken body?
Within this world that is so shoddy?

Help me, oh please help me,
Escape this darkness and become free.
No one knows who I am,
I am the water that breaks through this dam.
I have finally become free.

XxAzzieBrokenxX's poem did not meet the theme so I did not include it for voting.

Zev · Aug 05, 2009, 09:12 PM

I voted for Beast, again. I like his writing style, and the drama in the poem is the best part.

beast · Aug 06, 2009, 12:16 AM

I vote For starfire1036. I once knew a man who kept up with every culture custom among mideatersn tribes and could tell any one how to dress and what dialect they spoke, Never knew how lucky I was until I was stationed with a horride load expert who knew nothing of these things. Point is you recognize something most when you don't have it. Freedom is much the same, we often take it for granted. Also there is this bizarre symmetry in that someone who can right such wonderful works of love and beauty writes this piece when she hears the word freedom, it is so diverse.

*Peach_follows* · Aug 06, 2009, 10:29 AM

Mmm kay...

I think its a tad weird to blatantly tell who I've voted for. Even if it's obvious. BUT, I will say once again how impressed I am with the outcome. And some of the newer members sure have been hitting up the poetry forum with some worthy pieces.

Go go gadget CREATIVITY!

beast · Aug 06, 2009, 05:05 PM

I am happy to see people participating in the POTM vote, which I hope starfire1036 crushes this time, but the regular poetry forum is suffering a lot. There has not been a poem other than the ones by me posted since July 30, about a week ago. That is far too little. We need participation in the form of threads and criticism. It is meaningless to post unless there is feedback and a chance to read fresh material.

*Peach_follows* · Aug 07, 2009, 06:13 AM

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the regular poetry forum is suffering a lot. There has not been a poem other than the ones by me posted since July 30, about a week ago. That is far too little.

I dunno, I stress POTM because it is a contest, you only get that month to enter... and if there are few, or weak entries the contest isn't worth while. However I write in the poetry forum when I feel inspired to do so. I HATE when it seems like people are putting stuff in that forum just to have a thread there. Or when they comment and just say"That was a nice poem, I hope to see more". That's not really feedback at all.. I dont feel bad for not having a poem in the forum for over a week, because I don't write poetry to fill some forum quota. I actually think less is more in that forum. Or, a better way to put it is if you don't have something of quality to post... dont post it!
This problem has gotten better since our post count doesn't increase for poems. But since I never abused the forum... I miss having my posts in said forum count for something.

starfire1036 · Aug 10, 2009, 03:50 AM

WOOOOOO one vote haha. I voted for beast because he is not simple. His styles alter from poem to poem

beast · Aug 13, 2009, 04:48 PM

Well I am happy to win this contest for a third time. My main goal was to defeat sazzy and I did so BOOYAH. I always said I did not need to cheat to beat the moderators and this is some good vindication. I will stop competing in the contest, I told myself three victories and I am gone. This is also the first time I have competed head to head with Starife 1036. I have always had tremendous respect for her so that is awesome. Only six votes is bad though, it shows less participation. That is the same amount of people participating, which is very low and I am sad. I think becasue there has been a percieved illegitimacy in voting the contest has suffered. But good idea for those who declared their votes, keeps people in power from selecting winners.

View Poll Results: Which is the best!?
Peach_follows	1	16.67%
Sazzy	0	0%
starfire1036	1	16.67%
beast	3	50.00%
FLawEdmiNd	0	0%
LadyJuliaHale	1	16.67%
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Aug 05, 2009, 09:12 PM	#2 (permalink)
Zev ModZilla Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: Missouri Posts: 489 Thanks: 12 Thanked 45 Times in 44 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] I voted for Beast, again. I like his writing style, and the drama in the poem is the best part. __________________ Signature is a Sazzy original.
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Aug 06, 2009, 12:16 AM	#3 (permalink)
beast Devoted Otaku Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Cuba Posts: 870 Thanks: 273 Thanked 78 Times in 74 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] I vote For starfire1036. I once knew a man who kept up with every culture custom among mideatersn tribes and could tell any one how to dress and what dialect they spoke, Never knew how lucky I was until I was stationed with a horride load expert who knew nothing of these things. Point is you recognize something most when you don't have it. Freedom is much the same, we often take it for granted. Also there is this bizarre symmetry in that someone who can right such wonderful works of love and beauty writes this piece when she hears the word freedom, it is so diverse.
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Aug 06, 2009, 10:29 AM	#4 (permalink)
Peach_follows Femmebot Rehab Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 1,373 Thanks: 89 Thanked 118 Times in 101 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] Mmm kay... I think its a tad weird to blatantly tell who I've voted for. Even if it's obvious. BUT, I will say once again how impressed I am with the outcome. And some of the newer members sure have been hitting up the poetry forum with some worthy pieces. Go go gadget CREATIVITY! __________________ am i the baddest?SHO'NUFF am i the prettiest? SHO'NUFF KISS MY CONVERSE
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beast Devoted Otaku Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Cuba Posts: 870 Thanks: 273 Thanked 78 Times in 74 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] I am happy to see people participating in the POTM vote, which I hope starfire1036 crushes this time, but the regular poetry forum is suffering a lot. There has not been a poem other than the ones by me posted since July 30, about a week ago. That is far too little. We need participation in the form of threads and criticism. It is meaningless to post unless there is feedback and a chance to read fresh material.
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Aug 10, 2009, 03:50 AM	#7 (permalink)
starfire1036 Otaku Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 282 Thanks: 51 Thanked 34 Times in 32 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] WOOOOOO one vote haha. I voted for beast because he is not simple. His styles alter from poem to poem __________________
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Aug 13, 2009, 04:48 PM	#8 (permalink)
beast Devoted Otaku Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Cuba Posts: 870 Thanks: 273 Thanked 78 Times in 74 Posts	Re: July POTM - Freedom [Voting] Well I am happy to win this contest for a third time. My main goal was to defeat sazzy and I did so BOOYAH. I always said I did not need to cheat to beat the moderators and this is some good vindication. I will stop competing in the contest, I told myself three victories and I am gone. This is also the first time I have competed head to head with Starife 1036. I have always had tremendous respect for her so that is awesome. Only six votes is bad though, it shows less participation. That is the same amount of people participating, which is very low and I am sad. I think becasue there has been a percieved illegitimacy in voting the contest has suffered. But good idea for those who declared their votes, keeps people in power from selecting winners.
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