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    The kiss of Judas.

    As I'm hung here.
    All strung up here.
    Gasping.
    Choking...
    ...on my last breath.

    I remember him.
    Wise and holy.
    Beloved,
    Rabbi...
    ...I've handed death.

    He gained knowledge,
    I'd betray him.
    As we
    shared wine...
    ..."Truely, not I"

    Illuminating,
    All those near him.
    Sitting at
    his table...
    ...I did lie.

    Thirty pieces
    O' worthless silver.
    Money,
    for blood.
    I've damned my soul.

    The memory...
    ..of this, still haunts me.
    A kiss.
    A kiss.
    So they would know.

    I would forsake him...
    They came to take him.
    The kiss
    I laid...
    ...Upon his face.

    He said "Do with me
    what you will".
    And I,
    Stood still
    In my disgrace.

    So, I'm hung here.
    All strung up here.
    I took
    my life...
    ...for my own deceit.

    Remember me,
    A slave to sin.
    Thirty pieces
    of silver...
    ... thrown at my feet.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    Amazing. Sheer brilliance. You've read the Bible, you know the story of the betrayer well.

    Interesting use of sentence fragments. Work on your grammar.

    This really is an amazing piece, Peach. I applaud you.

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    I would never have thought to write from Judas' point of view.

    Very original. I guess the challenge of distinguishing yours from zyta's wasn't a bad thing at all ^_^ I love the way it has a broken flow, and the way the words sound as they run through my head...

    [Draw me a sheep!]

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    A very interesting poem indeed. I loved the broken flow and the last line rhyme. It really portrays what Judas was probably thinking as he hung himself. Great job.

    A big thanks to Renn for the sig! THANK YOU!

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    Hi Mr. poet I did like your poem,
    I felt you filming it and you could deliver your feelings to
    the receiver I advice you to publish more and here a small poem as a reply:

    That poem I think is good

    to give us more,no doubt you should

    to translate feeling you indeed could

    if i would see you with respect I stood...

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    Interesting poem. Easter through the eyes of Judas, the one who betrayed him. Interestingly done. Not bad at all...

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    Re: The kiss of Judas.

    This is interesting i've never though of this at all or looking at his point of view. it's sad though very sad.
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