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    Cool Life Comes With A Price (August entry)

    Life is too short.
    We take it for granted.
    It's always about give and take.
    Only doing things for our sake.

    Too blinded
    By the world's demands.
    Too embarrassed
    With the avarice, we grasp in our hands.

    Only to succumb
    To inevitable consequence.
    Keeping quiet
    Until proven with evidence.

    Never abstaining
    The things we desire.
    Failing to get
    The things we require.

    Focus on necessities
    Like food and water.
    Not on the addiction
    That never seems to falter.

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    Re: Life Comes With A Price (August entry)

    I was quite a bit influenced by this poem. Parts of this piece seemed as though they were speaking to my spirit.... Kinda moved me there, esspecially toward the end.

    "Never abstaining
    The things we desire.
    Failing to get
    The things we require.

    Focus on necessities
    Like food and water.
    Not on the addiction
    That never seems to falter"

    Just the word "addiction" there, opens so many doors for the reader on a personal level. Because exactly what the addiction is, is not defined here. So, it's basically like the reader gets to fill in the blank with their own obession\addiction of choice.

    What I wish were more clear, is where rememberence ties into this.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Life Comes With A Price (August entry)

    Although i don't see exactly what's being remembered here, i must say that the poem is indeed true. And people wonder why i'm so misanthropic. Anywho, the poem was very powerful and portrayed one main flaw of humanity in a very profound way. Go you!
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