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    Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    Tis short, I know. Hope you enjoy it nonetheless.

    Life, Death, and Rebirth

    The path that leads to things not shown,
    To hills unplanned,
    Across the dreams…
    Until the end.

    Foresee the life that drains each instant,
    The gripping soul
    Commands all home;
    To slumber endlessly.

    Coming back, are we really any different?
    Has life changed,
    Are we the same?
    Can you tell? Maybe.

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    Re: Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    I really liked this one. It shows the simplicity behind the theme and leaves you feeling uncertain.

    Definitely hope to see more from you!


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    Re: Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    i really love this poem it was short but awesome and i mainly loved it when you said "The gripping soul commands all home" it made it sound much better hope to hear more from you .

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    Re: Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    this poem is soooo amazing it leaves you with a sense of uncertainty with where on goes when they die and where one will be in the next life.
    Whether the new life would be recognized as a new person or a person that he was, if he/she can remember who he/she was anyway.
    anyway its a really wonderful poem keep it up

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    Re: Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    thanks everyone. I tried to use a Minute Style Poem, but failed as I neared the end of the poem. For those that don't know what a minute poem is, look below.

    Minute Poetry
    The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict
    iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables.
    The rhyme scheme is as follows: aabb, ccdd, eeff

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    Re: Life, Death, And Rebirth - Jan 09

    *Congrats* You proved that simple is better & got your message across perfectly... I guess I was one of those ppl who over did it & needs to take notes from this poem... ^_^ I hope to see you on the next/another contest cause you are a good competitor & I love the competition...

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