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    Live without you.

    The day of the funeral she sat,
    Elegantly poised, with tiny
    Hands politely folded.
    Traditional black veil,
    Covered beautiful face.
    All the better that they didn't see,
    There were no tears upon it.
    Insted a slightly upturned grin.
    She dabbed at her eyes,
    But what they didn't see,
    She was just rolling them.
    You just can't be sad,
    When you finally found out,
    That because of him,
    And the horrible things that he did,
    You can live without him.
    But he should NEVER,
    Live without you.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Live without you.

    Insted a slightly upturned grin
    I think the correct spelling is Instead ^^

    Hmm... love the descriptions as usual nicely done ^^
    Last edited by RayMe; Oct 31, 2007 at 12:35 AM.

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    Re: Live without you.

    cool... sad and dark but cool... emo too... i like it!
    i'll choose to love whoever i wish to love and nobody can stop me from doing so ----

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    Re: Live without you.

    luv the way you've composed it...
    it's quite deep...


    "Never tell a man that you love him until he has declared his undying love for you."

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    Re: Live without you.

    Tee-hee. You called me emo. I am glad you all liked it. I appriciate your comments. Rayme today when I get back from the doctors I will fix my spelling. I like this poem but I think I should have used my methods of suicide to enter this contest but I'm pleased with this too.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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