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Reply With QuoteWow...That has to be one of the most beutifull and yet one of the sadest poems I've ever read. - very, very, very well done. It realy touches the heart.
For in the past
i see just me and you,
and in the present
ive been forced to start a new
You left me cold
with out reason or care.
my heart you did scold
and my feeling you did tear
I sit here now
just thinking of you
and asking myself
what the hell did i do?
Was it the way I kissed you?
Did i do it wrong?
Was it when we danced?
Did i play the right song?
How did i miss
the fact you weren't happy?
All i tried to do
ended in you feeling angry.
In the mirror my eyes wade
and in the past your memories fade
in the wake of a new love
like one sent from above
Wow...That has to be one of the most beutifull and yet one of the sadest poems I've ever read. - very, very, very well done. It realy touches the heart.
thanks toxic It was something a threw together a while ago and descided to post here today...Originally Posted by Toxic Otaku
A rather nice poem, although this theme of break-ups is far too common and the flow could have been nicer. On the other hand, I see that you have put an effort in to make it ryhme, which is rather great, and I like your language use ^^
However, the biggest problem here is that this poem is posted here on the first of february and the boss said "1/30, no later" >.< Please be carefull with the dates >.<
Take care ^^
I was... unable to get online because my mother had taken my internet away... that is the onle reason i posted so late.. U usually post every month but i didnt not have a chance to post on time.. if i get dq'd them w/e
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