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    Nightmares of a Hopless Girl [POTM-August Entry]

    Nightmares of a Hopeless Girl

    I cannot turn on the light,
    As there is no light bulb there,
    I am stuck within this night,
    Trying to find my way out of here.

    Needles coming after me,
    Spiders spinning their webs,
    I'm trying so hard to flee,
    But my feet so ever slowly, ebbs.

    With the ground so far down,
    As I am peering over the edge,
    Here I am, wearing my crown,
    Stuck between a wedge.

    You speak to me,
    But I cannot talk,
    Why can you not see,
    That I can barely walk?

    I walk ahead,
    Only to be brought back,
    I watch the fire as it begins to spread,
    Waiting for the attack.

    When you run away,
    I try to look for you,
    But I cannot find my way,
    As the darkened sky loses its blue.

    But now that I've awoken,
    Drenched in sweat,
    My heart has been broken,
    As I wipe away the threat.
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    This is just a poem full of my many nightmares that I've had, basically a collaboration of nightmares.
    I'm standing in the dark calling your name, But when you don't answer,
    I realized everyday it's the same.

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    Re: Nightmares of a Hopless Girl [POTM-August Entry]

    Excellent. I didn't get it until i read the afterword though. The four line stanza in generally used for poems pertaining to the sensual and using it in this context makes it extra creepy. Newer poets are rising up in the forums. Some newer blood is starting off on the level it took me so long to get to. You got us all feeling like old software.

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    Re: Nightmares of a Hopless Girl [POTM-August Entry]

    Quote Originally Posted by beast View Post
    Excellent. I didn't get it until i read the afterword though. The four line stanza in generally used for poems pertaining to the sensual and using it in this context makes it extra creepy. Newer poets are rising up in the forums. Some newer blood is starting off on the level it took me so long to get to. You got us all feeling like old software.
    Well, I wouldn't call myself a newer poet, because I've been writing poetry for years. Some are good, some are not so good. Thank you for your kind words!
    I'm standing in the dark calling your name, But when you don't answer,
    I realized everyday it's the same.

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