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    October POTM Entree

    "Home"

    The memories are slowly forgotten
    As the destruction of a soul is found
    Bound and tattered she lays there
    Tears of an unknown pain still shinning in her eyes

    She sees his shadow on the ground
    And slowly she looks up to find
    One of the men who has brought her
    So much pain and misery staring back at her

    Slowly she stands, wanting to fight him off
    But the second she’s up, she’s pinned against him
    His mouth crushing hers
    While hands roam where they please

    She braces herself for yet another brutal attack
    Knowing what is to come of her
    She searches for some sort of protection
    As he throws her carelessly to the floor

    Crying out in pain as he forces himself on her
    The pain and memories come back all to quickly
    And unable to keep herself from falling apart
    She waits for him to become satisfied

    It seems to last forever but eventually it’s over
    He kicks her when she doesn’t move
    Before grabbing and pulling her up by her hair
    And giving her up to her other brother

    When it’s all said and done
    She curls up in a corner, feeling so alone
    Wishing there was someone to protect her
    And save her from this place she calls “Home”
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    Re: October POTM Entree

    wow, that's really good, you should really make more, and keep up the good work.

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    Re: October POTM Entree

    Oh my, this poem is seriously intense. Im affraid to ask what inspired it....

    Man.... I feel so tense and uncomfortable now. Poems rarely EVER bring out these types of emotion in me. I can usually distance myself enough from it, and remember the art and expression. But this felt so real... it made it hard for me to do that.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: October POTM Entree

    Nicely written and Intense. It makes one feel sad and want to help her, and take a gun to the men. I really enjoyed this poem.

    I hope that you don't go through that sort of thing or if you did I hope you never do again. Things ilike that are horrible but it happens everywhere all the time. It's disgusting... Just because they are stronger and want something they think they can do as they please.

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: October POTM Entree

    @ Peach_follows: Personal Experience is what inspired it... and I'm sorry that it caused you to be that way.. but I feel as though if it can reach a person to that level then it was worth writing. Personal Experiences create some of the best poems.. in my opinion.

    @ Darkened_Star: I hope no one has to go through what I've been through.. It's something that I wouldn't even wish on my worst enemy but you know, these things happen to men as well.
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