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  1. Oct 11, 2007 10:07 PM #1
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    Perdition (Horror Theme)

    Dreary glows melting her eyes
    A magnetic pulse dancing in the stale air
    Computerized bliss

    She can clamp to reality no longer
    The poison allure of that screen beckons
    And she is back again, wilting

    Praising the intangible happiness it brings
    Leaving those who care in the past
    Hopping the high-speed bandwagon

    Green eyes turn gray and roll back
    Pasty white skin sits barely on the bone
    Computerized bliss, perdition

    She is nothing inside, desecrated
    Touched and torn by an invisible hand
    Where did her smile go?

    Her ruined spirit gone from this world
    Crushed not by flesh but by technology
    A horror story that is sadly true

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    Well, I decided to try. Hopefully this is scary enough to fall into the category of horror.

    To elaborate though, the poem is the story of a young woman losing herself to a computer and eventually claiming forfeit to reality. Frightening, I think.
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.
  2. Oct 12, 2007 01:02 AM #2
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    Re: Perdition (Horror Theme)

    Hmm... this is confusing.. i can't understand this poem T.T im so dumb...

    but i like the powerful wordings... and.. i think the poem is a bit like...lifeless,... hmm... not much "energy" in there but this poem is abt a woman who lost her soul... yea...
    nicely done ^^

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    Re: Perdition (Horror Theme)

    like RayMe... Im unsure of how much I actaully understood of this poem myself. But, I've read alot of your work in the past, and I know that anything scary or twisted is right up your alley. Cheers to a flawed mind
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    Re: Perdition (Horror Theme)

    Wow Flawed, I didn't know you did poetry.

    This was very descriptive and used very advanced words, something you tend not to see in most poems here.

    I always wait till the last minute to do mine, so I haven't entered yet, but good luck to u.


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    Re: Perdition (Horror Theme)

    Neh, how come no one gets it?

    Guess the author or the only one who sees the point sometimes ^^

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