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    rage (jan. potm entry)

    Stalking quietly no one hears , no one
    knows silently it builds so much hate and
    bitterness that i cant see clearly , calmly
    i sit and wait not letting emotions blind me from
    what i need.

    In the stillness of the night i look through the
    wall not seeing anything but that moment when
    i can let out that anger release that pint up rage
    to be able to feel free of these man made constraints,
    so close on the brink yet theres still more to be left
    unsaid.

    I take in my breath and hold it as thoughts
    of carnal desire feel my every need not thinking
    if who it is or what they have done because only
    the rage comforts me and is honest with me when
    all other belifes and emotions fail.

    The door unlocks as they see my quiet shell
    so obedient and peaceful following there lead
    maybe now i will let loose what others see as
    a mear story or maybe something that can't be.
    ___________________________________________
    this poem is just something i thought of you know
    a what if kind of thing i tried to put it into words
    so this is what i came up with anyway its about
    holding back on so many things till it just numbs you
    and you just slip away as bad things happen if you know
    what im getting at.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: rage (jan. potm entry)

    Its a rather nice poem, although it was rather hard to read because you still keep on dividing sentences into different lines in rather strange places and because of that terrible terrible avy you have XD Hahaha XD it disturbs me so badly >.<
    The thing is that rage is not a thing that most people write poems about- it is strange and different and yet very real and understandable. And you have described rather well, so well I can nearly imagine myself feeling that and thinking those thoughts. Makes me realize about the existance of feelings such as rage or remember when I felt rage (which must be a loooong time ago >.< XD)
    Anyways... nice work ^^

    Gaaaah... the avy!!!! @.@ *faints* XD

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