HolderOfTheDarkChalice

Stalking quietly no one hears , no one
knows silently it builds so much hate and
bitterness that i cant see clearly , calmly
i sit and wait not letting emotions blind me from
what i need.

In the stillness of the night i look through the
wall not seeing anything but that moment when
i can let out that anger release that pint up rage
to be able to feel free of these man made constraints,
so close on the brink yet theres still more to be left
unsaid.

I take in my breath and hold it as thoughts
of carnal desire feel my every need not thinking
if who it is or what they have done because only
the rage comforts me and is honest with me when
all other belifes and emotions fail.

The door unlocks as they see my quiet shell
so obedient and peaceful following there lead
maybe now i will let loose what others see as
a mear story or maybe something that can't be.
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this poem is just something i thought of you know
a what if kind of thing i tried to put it into words
so this is what i came up with anyway its about
holding back on so many things till it just numbs you
and you just slip away as bad things happen if you know
what im getting at.

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Lasura

Its a rather nice poem, although it was rather hard to read because you still keep on dividing sentences into different lines in rather strange places and because of that terrible terrible avy you have XD Hahaha XD it disturbs me so badly >.<
The thing is that rage is not a thing that most people write poems about- it is strange and different and yet very real and understandable. And you have described rather well, so well I can nearly imagine myself feeling that and thinking those thoughts. Makes me realize about the existance of feelings such as rage or remember when I felt rage (which must be a loooong time ago >.< XD)
Anyways... nice work ^^

Gaaaah... the avy!!!! @.@ *faints* XD

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My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge