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    A Search for Beauty

    Random colors
    are all about.
    Summer flowers
    begin to sprout.

    Sitting there
    all alone,
    A young maiden
    humming a lovely tone.

    She looks about
    as if nothing to do.
    The flowers she counts
    keep her from seeing you.

    In her eyes
    you can see
    the little girl
    she used to be.

    As she sits there
    with nothing on her mind,
    she sees you
    and becomes part of your mind.

    Her face scared
    fore her father is to blame.
    She walks proudly,
    she has no shame.

    In your eyes
    she is so beautiful and pure.
    To everyone else,
    just an eye sore.

    On the inside
    is all you see.
    Beauty from within
    Is what she will be.
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    Re: Maiden

    i love it, rather powerful. however, i think the title was set for us. but ah well. Mods! overlook that little fact and let this poem in! haha. yes, i think its that good. nice imagery, and perfect stanza size.
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    Re: Maiden

    Quote Originally Posted by NeoDeath90 View Post
    i love it, rather powerful. however, i think the title was set for us. but ah well. Mods! overlook that little fact and let this poem in! haha. yes, i think its that good. nice imagery, and perfect stanza size.
    you think i should change the title? i can change it i guess

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    Re: Maiden

    Quote Originally Posted by starfire1036 View Post
    you think i should change the title? i can change it i guess
    according to the rules, the title must be "A Search For Beauty"
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    Re: Maiden

    Quote Originally Posted by NeoDeath90 View Post
    according to the rules, the title must be "A Search For Beauty"
    i actually didnt know that... i just thought that it was what u were to write about... >.> guess ill keep that in mind >.< well it is still a good poem, no?

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    Re: Maiden

    Quote Originally Posted by starfire1036 View Post
    i actually didnt know that... i just thought that it was what u were to write about... >.> guess ill keep that in mind >.< well it is still a good poem, no?
    its rather excellent! as said before, i love the imagery.
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