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    Sedoka Of The Warriors Soul. (my first Sedoka)

    This is a style called Sedoka 5-7-7-5-7-7. Derived from Waka. Kamo is the main river in Kyoto.

    Much foes we helped smash.
    Lament for those turned to ash.
    As I see incence ascend,
    On moon-lit kamo,
    I realize what I defend.
    This stream again lets me know.

    Kamo is the artery of waterways in Kyoto. Much of the culture revolves around that river. I went through a deployment then was transferred to another unit that then deployed to intercept slave trades. I had begun to think the whole world was not worth fighting for but my trips to kyoto and seeing the masses gathered in prayer or revelry make me remember. I wrote this there now.
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    Re: Sedoka Of The Warriors Soul. (my first Sedoka)

    This must have been hard to do, rhyme and stay with the the 5-7-7-5-7-7 guide line. Good job is all I have to say.

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    Re: Sedoka Of The Warriors Soul. (my first Sedoka)

    Nice poem, dude! Your references to Japan are beautiful.

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