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    Spare Some Change... <September>

    Can you spare some change..?
    For the needy, homeless, & the deranged...
    Do you believe the predicament they are in
    is their fault & they're the ones to blame..?

    Can you spare some change..?
    Money makes the world turn...
    If that statement stays true it is
    going to help play its part & ignite
    the spark for the world to burn...

    Can you spare some change..?
    Even, if you would rather things to remain the same...
    Everyone knows different can be so strange...
    But sometimes a new way of life needs to be ordained...

    Can you spare some change..?
    If Obama says "yes we can"...
    Can you believe in words from another man??
    Skys the limit, so why do we still stand??
    It's time to learn to fly & stop sinking in the
    "parallel" quick sand...

    Can you spare the inevitable.??
    Even, if you were not able??
    A tiresome pawn sitting at society's round table...
    Got use to being read society's fables...

    Can you spare the inevitable..?
    Can you spare some change..?

    A change is going to come,
    but it will never get here if
    we don't give some...

    Can you spare some change..?

    The heart can't lie... Truth is... I love you!!!

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    Re: Spare Some Change... <September>

    I am so super happy that you wrote... you just have no idea.

    My only suddgestoin. I would remove the word "to" from this sentence:

    Even, if you would rather things to remain the same...
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Spare Some Change... <September>

    the poem is well constructed and Peach did have a point in this but i don't know about the other judges but i think the change on the theme meant changes a change in life of something in you changed though the idea of a person asking for some change (like money) may be equated to ask for help.
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